if i could put this night in a cartoon 
maybe we could have a good laugh 
sad and lonely faces 
drawn as if in some other places 
in cars and trucks 
down some dark streets 
in the illusion of motion
campy as someone else’s sorrow 
who can only be painted 
or drawn 
a geometric form 
long on the floor 
motionless 
as a vodka bottle  
a discarded cap 
a small stain 
a stubbed out cigarette 
in an empty sardine can 
a puzzling circumstance 
bags packed 
the phone 
scratched in pencil strokes 
always silent 
like a clown face 
the phone 
broad like 
a clown’s frown 
not capable of tragedy
Saturday, November 03, 2007
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Very interesting poem.
"campy as someone else’s sorrow "--that is such a great line!
Thanks Ruela! This is the paintin I would paint if I had that skill. I thought of you as I was writing it! I wondered if you would enjoy its non-linear geometry.
Thanks Ashraf! I am absolutely fascinated by the way a medium (photography, film, cartoons, painting) changes how we feel about what we look at. Glad you enjoyed the line, it is the central position of the poem. Thanks, my friend!
That's so sad Russel
Thanks Sue! Looking for a little distance - glad you responded to it, sweet lady!
I enjoyed this piece. The imagery,so still, yet vivid. I especially liked "phone broad like a clown's frown."
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Hi Debora and Welcome! Thanks for noticing that. I enjoyed your comment very much.
"...a clown’s frown
not capable of tragedy"
really like this words. It shows the pain and sadness inside the person. And it's cool, that poem written in such an interesting way.
Thanks G-naraah! That's really the issue isn't it - I mean we simply transfer our sorrow to some other medium and we can look at it as if it was somewhere farther away and not be destroyed by what we are looking at. Welcome and thanks for the comment. I hope to see you here often.
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