so today you stand before me
so very guilty of your crime
you loved and were so innocent
time and again you wont repent
time again i have to try you
the sentence always is the same
to be drunk dry by the ageing
vampire who shuffles slowly by
eyes dim as misty time itself
drinks in gurgles careful not to
kill you only leave you stumbling
weak so you cannot strive again
so your innocence is not your
fault so i can take from you what
you wont abandon your strength is
offensive in extreme so it
will be sucked away and your love
can be taken from you without
your giving
in the end too weak to rise
vampire sadly close your eyes
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i think this is my favourite!
i absoultely loved it, related to it especially with the latter half.
drinks in gurgles careful not to
kill you only leave you stumbling
weak so you cannot strive again
so your innocence is not your
fault so i can take from you what
you wont abandon your strength is
offensive in extreme so it
will be sucked away and your love
can be taken from you without
your giving
Thanks Gulnaz! Your comments always make me feel so good! This one helped me to realize that section was really a seperate stanza and I have made the correction in the poem. Thanks for the help!
I like the idea of being offered to the old vampire, a sort of repeating hell
Thanks Sue! In a certain context hell is a daily experience! What does the devil (and all dictators) most wish for? That we become weak, of course. What is the opposite of order? The lack of strength to continuously repair it (as it is a continuous process of deteriation -- ergo the third law of thermodynamics).
i love the rhythm of this.
" and your love
can be taken from you without
your giving"
favorite line. very creative poem.
Thanks Lorena! This was a very carefully metered poem and I'm glad that the rhythym appeals to you!! Glad you liked the poem!
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