It is inexplicable to me
we are so wet
even the air sags, laden
or is so heavy that,
when in bangs into something,
it knocks it down.
Our sounds are gurgles and burps,
bubbles in water, punctuated with pressure.
We are creatures of wet land,
We are the commonness of water and air,
In a world where water stands
and watches or, worse, chases
after you, moving at frightening speed,
then bites you with huge,
thirsty teeth
leaving you laying,
oozing.
Monday, October 30, 2006
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what remarkable imagination to give life to so vague a subject!!! an entire poem dedicated to bubbles? Im pleasantly surprised!!!
Thanks Nicole! I tend to see people as bubbles, a breath of air stretching a house of water, so giving life here is not such a tough job. Thanks for the wonderful comment.
This one made my day!
I was back being a child playing with bubbles for a hile. Then it dawned it's about us, people!
Lovely! Thanks gautami tripathy. How can something so innocent as bubbles turn into us? I'm glad the trick worked for you. Thanks for the wonderful comment.
We are "wet" creatures floating in and on air!! But, I suspect there's more here than bursting bubbles... But, I'm a suspicious kind of guy. Another good Russell/Darth poem!!
DUH! Of course its about people!!
How dense I am....haha
..and here I am reading the poem all over again in a new light with a new meaning!
"We are the commonness of water and air,"
What a line that binds us all! It is remarkable how words can make such beauty of things, and you did a good job here.
Best wishes in your writing.
Thanks Pat/Yoda! Your suspicions are well founded. Realizing what tigers are made of while watching one charge its prey give a whole new view of the phrase running water! Thanks for the great comment.
Hi Nicole! How else could I trick you to come back twice for the same poem. I am shameless, of course. You are a bright and lovely young lady and I'm delighted to have the honor of a second comment from you. Thanks Nicole.
Thanks m. shahin! Those are our humble origins indeed (and one of my favorite phrases in the poem too). Thanks for the wonderful comment and best wishes on your writing too.
Thanks Andrew! One word comments are, in a word, fantastic.
a wonderful poem that works well on more than one level. enjoyed!
You prick quite a few bubbles with that making us realise that we are just water and air....and common at that!
Thanks polona! More the one level is definately good. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for the great comment!
Thanks plus ultra! There is a wonderful innocence to those common things. Things all of God's plan. It is hard to imagine how they become anger, hate, greed and murder when we vivify them. But vivify them we do, another part of the plan. Thanks for the great comment.
So many depths and layers to this one, Russell! Well done!
Thanks Aurora! Glad you found this interesting. Thanks for the great comment.
join under your country for peace theme in http://mimilenox.blogspot.com/2006/10/grant-us-peace.html or can get the info ...spread the word if u can through poetry
Thanks Nasra! I just checked the site and was glad to find it. Thanks for telling me about this.
Humans are a scary lot all a bit scared of each other I like the bubble metaphore because I kind of think we build them around ourselves
Thanks Sue. Water with intentions and desires is pretty scary stuff, I agree. Thanks for the great comment.
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