fill me with that face
dark and beautiful as
intimate words
promise me
you will linger on my lips
lost for a moment
and that
open or closed
my eyes will see
that secret world
only we know of
surround my ears
with the silky ocean
of your whisper
in the pendulous light of
a moonlight sonata
for a man
gone deaf on the world
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lovely!
;)
Thanks Ruela!
?D
for a man
gone deaf on the world
your poems generally end with a great bang!! that's why they affect me more...
very nice... :D
btw, could you find out abt the STB blog? plz leave me a comment on my blog if u do
Thanks Shubhodeep! Got used to doing couplets at the end from all those sonnets I've written. I’m glad you got a Bang out of this one.
I still haven't heard from CJ. You'll be the first to know when I do.
Russell, this is very beautiful. I hope this is written for someone very real.
Thanks Pat! You good wishes are a great kindess to me. Thanks for that and I hope all is well for you too, my old friend.
This truly captures how overwhelming love can feel and how it can change your whole perception. The world is good when you're in love! It's beautiful.
Thanks Louise! Transformation is the name of the game and we are doing it all the time. This one is particularly overwhelming, as you so aptly observed. I'm glad you liked this and thanks for the great comment, sweet lady.
It communicates correctly what happens when you are with that person.
Thanks Anna! Good luck with your books. Wow lady, you really do have a serious lust for adventure. The early 90's anywhere in the former Soviet Union was really difficult, but Mongolia? I'm impressed!
surround my ears
with the silky ocean
of your whisper
I adore the fact that you've put together "silky" and "ocean" to form a metaphor that makes the reader FEEL the sound. ^_^
We're both fans of Beethoven, eh? *grin*
Cheers.
Thanks sweet soulless! Yes we are both Beethoven fans for sure. I am aware that you and I both experience the world a little different than most and it is my pleasure to share these moments with you especially. Thanks for the fabulous comment.
Cheers my sweet one.
A beautiful paralell Russel really moving
Thanks Sue! I'm glad that parallel worked for you. I'm also glad to see you here. I hope this means you're getting some blogging time again.
Here and there Russel and I've so missed it
Sue, it is always great to hear from you and I hope your time frees up the way you want soon!
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