Yuckelbel's Canon: holes

Friday, April 21, 2006

holes

so she lightened up, smiled

unbridled laughter for such a dark horse

sticky note on the monitor

unmoving, moonlight on the water

the earth poured in where the sea opened

birds fly because there is land

so he dreamed poetry but couldn’t write it down

14 comments:

Sue hardy-Dawson said...: 'The earth poured in where the sea opened' I love that line; 1:27 AM
Pat Paulk said...: Russell, I like this new style!! Good one!!; 4:22 AM
Russell Ragsdale said...: Thanks Sue! Just another type of hole -- the hole in the sea is where the land is. I was just playing with things that fit the concept of holes when I discovered how they could be formed into a poem. You have a blockbuster of a new poem, by the way!; 9:51 AM
Russell Ragsdale said...: Hi Pat! Glad you enjoyed this. I'm having a lot of fun playing with this form. Lots of possibility here. Thanks for the nice comment.; 9:56 AM
Neetee said...: This is great!
It takes me back to the wonderful poetry of the 60's when people knew how to paint life with a pen, and now you're doing it with a keyboard.

(I'm snapping my fingers having appreciated the beat.)
:)
GOOD STUFF!; 4:40 PM
Russell Ragsdale said...: Thanks Neetee! The 60's IS when I started writing this kind of poetry. Haven't returned to it for years. Glad you are enjoying it (I am too). Thanks for the great comments.; 6:50 PM
Roger Stevens said...: Lovely poem.

No holes in that I could see.

(Sorry...)

How's life? Busy here as ever. Spring is late. The tomatoes in the greenhouse are only just getting started. Yesterday was sunny - today there's rain.

Keep up the good work - and the poetic canon.; 6:44 AM
Russell Ragsdale said...: Hi Roger! Got promoted to visiting lecturer at the university here. Just finished the final exams for the night courses last week and will start the finals on my day lectures this week. Busy is the word!

We are having a lovely spring here. Cool at night, rainy yesterday, days of warm and bright more often now without a cloud in the sky.

Thanks for the great comments! Feeling like doing a Sunday joint, au provence. Definitely must be spring!; 10:27 AM
Anonymous said...: I like the mysteries in this one.; 12:02 PM
Russell Ragsdale said...: Thanks Aurora! I like using this style because you get to work in more mysterious ways. Thanks for the great comment.; 12:57 AM
Natalia L. Rudychev said...: Vivid images.
I love this poem.; 4:47 AM
Russell Ragsdale said...: Thanks Roger! Glad you enjoyed this and very good to hear from you. I hope both of our schedules will ease up a little soon. Its a lovely spring day here today!

Something is going wrong with blogger,BTW. This is the third time I've added this comment and another one has disappeared that was coming in. Strange!; 6:37 PM
Russell Ragsdale said...: Hi Natalia! Thanks for the glad and happy comment.; 6:43 PM
Russell Ragsdale said...: Wow, suddenly a bunch of lost comments appeared! Thanks for your patience everybody!; 6:51 PM