I was a gulp of high air -
a bird breathing in,
a black dot on blue paper,
a privileged recipient
of finite sacrament
of souls of flying saints.
That all happened the moment
you taught me splendid roundness
as defined by the touch of your lips.
The other mysteries fell, one by one,
cities under siege,
watched by the terrible army of our love,
filling all the horizon, insatiable, made indomitable
by human frailty and sheer force.
Friday, September 22, 2006
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WOW! You're on a roll, Russell! This is one of the best poems I've read on this blog!
great poem russell!
Thanks Aurora! What a wonderful comment. Glad you enjoyed this and thanks for the fireworks!
Hi Craig! Spaceba bolshoi, moi droog! (we're both ESL teachers)
Speaking of kisses being ever so sweet. Love can definetly change the world.
"the terrible army of her love"
AWESOME!
Awesome poem! Thanks for sending it for the ROTB.
It's beautiful Mastera.
"The other mysteries fell, one by one,
cities under siege,
watched by the terrible army of our love,
filling all the horizon, insatiable, made indomitable
by human frailty and sheer force."
I also think this is your best poem. It is full of power and especially these lines. I like how it is a love poem but it does not read exactly like the love poems I read. It evokes more the power of love than anything else. And you describe that power by 'cities' 'mysteries' 'army'...great!
Thanks Ozy! What a hot comment! Glad you liked this.
Hi Jo! Glad you liked it. Have a great time with ROTB.
Hi my sweet Scheherazade! Thanks for saying that. You name makes me crazy.
Thanks m. shahin! What a great comment. I'm delighted you enjoyed this.
Hi Russell,
The Ringing is posted! Thanks for participating.
http://jojanoski.wordpress.com/2006/09/24/the-ringing-of-the-bards-xiv/
What an interesting opening. So vivid.
Hi Jo! Thanks for letting me know and a great big thanks to you for hosting!
Thanks pearl! I've had lots of comments on the last five lines. Thanks for noticing the air and sky in the first part. Thanks for the great comment!
This was a great poem. Like the line about the black dot on blue paper. Thanks for commenting on my post. I will take a look at your future post.
Not sure I can add much, except to say that I agree with the rest that this is one of your best pieces that I have read.
Powerful and memorable. Great.
Well done.
Russell I go away for the weekend and you stir up all kinds of trouble. I love "...you taught me splendid roundness as defined by the touch of your lips". Great line of poetry, but it also ignites fire in the memories!!
Hi Pat! Call me mister incorrigible! Glad you liked that line. I have fallen to my death from those slipery lips perhaps thousands of times.
Thanks kgt! What warm and wonderful words.
Hi Daniel! I'm glad that you agree! Thanks for that!
Thanks Terry! I think that image is a personal favorite of mine too. Thanks for sharing what worked for you.
Are you really in Kazakhstan!?
I am fascinated by the Aral Sea and the environmental issues surrounding what took place there...I'll be back to read your lovely poems.
Thanks Cathy! Yes I live in Almaty, Kazakhstan. I'm looking forward to your visits, Thanks for stoping by and leaving a comment.
I was thinking of writing a love poem for a change, I guess I don't need to I will direct my visitors to your blog, great poem!!!!!
We all fall at the army of love, a great sense of the heat of passion, when the whole world falls away
Hi plus ultra! I am deeply moved by such a profound compliment! Thanks so much.
Yes Sue, the great contradiction of the indomitableness of frailty. Thanks for the great comment!
This poem deserves a standing ovation, Russell! I agree with everyone that this is the best I've read in here. The content's lived up to the title, played to the tune of the message that Love Conquers All.
(Thank you for your thoughtful message. I am definitely getting better, dear Russell!)
Thanks Cecilia, I am glad to hear that - I was worried about you! Glad you're well enough to come for a visit. What a wonderful comment, too, Thanks sweet Cecilia!
All this in you Im amazed...true this one of your best
Thanks Nasra! I am so pleased you enjoyed this. Thanks for the wonderful comment.
I can feel the spiritual overtones, russell!
Glad I got here after a long time.
I am going to link you to my blog.
Thanks gautami tripathy! Glad you found something you were looking for in my humble words. Welcome and thanks for linking up; I'd like to link to you too.
beautiful , beautiful poem!!!
began to choose my favourite parts, just couldnt pick one!
A particularly fine poem.
Your poems improve as you hone your poetic skills don't they?
Who are your favourite poets?
And did you take the photo yourself?
Thanks dear Gulnaz! I'm happy that you enjoyed this. Thanks for the warm and wonderful comments!
Thanks Roger! I'm glad you liked it so much. I'm reading a lot of David Lehman and some Bukowski at the moment but I like Ashberry very much - certainly one of my all time favorites. Yes, I took that picture.
Powerful write! Enjoyed reading it loud!
Ah Natalia, the awsome power of love - the real impulse for creation. I'm glad you got to the music in this piece. Thanks for the great comment!
how are you
Hi Gulnaz! I'm fine, just got a lot to do right now. I'll be more active again once midterms finish. Thanks for thinking about me, my sweet.
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