show me the night sky
where darkness is your rib cage
and echoing within
is the pounding of your heart
i know that thump
pushing that blue liquid
carrying things jumbled together
like love hope pain
and that gathering ball
of strands of distrust
anxiously tying themselves
to your youthful thoughts
dragged kicking and screaming
into that silence and darkness
i know in that deep dark
you could show me
your heart
and i could see those letters
carved in it
as if florescent
and so i show you yours on mine
Tuesday, July 10, 2007
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14 comments:
Russell... WOW! Great work. Loved the imagery and flow of this one.
Hey OzMan! Thanks for that wonderful comment. The imagery was intentional, in fact that is where I started, but the flow was just a happy accident. Thanks for your appreciation, my friend.
Another great one!
Loved the imagery as well! In my mind's eye, I saw the initials all a-glow on those two hearts. Great work, indeed!
And, Russell, thank you for the offer for the candies but I no longer live in Belgium. :-) I have moved to California!
Thank you for your thoughtfulness and generosity, my friend. Hope you are well.
You works always are enjoyable and interesting. The title of this poem caught my attention.
Hey Ruela! Thanks for that, my friend!
Hi Cecilia! Glad you liked this, I had the same picture in mind! Sending chocolate to Belgium is a bit like sending coal to Newcastle but I thought you might enjoy the novelty of it. Too bad you moved. I don't know if I ever could have found time to visit you but Europe is a lot closer to me than America. Hope you're happy in California. I am well, thanks and I hope you and yours are all the same, sweet lady.
Hi Terry! Thanks for mentioning that. I use minimalis word picture titles and I wonder if they are effective eye-catchers. Obviously this one worked for you. Thanks for the great comment!
"carrying things jumbled together
like love hope pain" - i can be lost and catatonic in those words! and the last stanza? magnifique! *sigh*
Thanks Faye! I'm glad you liked this and left such a wonderful comment!
I love carving initials in things that knives can't scratch. Definitely publishable!!
Thanks Pat! I'm glad you found this so stimulating.
very nice movement
Thanks Jilly! I'm so glad you enjoyed it.
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